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22 Novembre 2009 18:51:44

bonsoir, j'ai travailler sur un commentaire cettte aprés midi, pouvez vous me le corrigé svp ?

To me, money does bring happiness, because it is very important, there are many people all around the world, who have bad living conditions, because they do not have the money for education, medical help, food etc. In today's world, we can not survive without money.Whithout money we can not live.We need money to get a good education, to have a comfortable way of life, to have fun...Therefore money is a necessity for our survival.
you can buy anything you want with money. Some people with lots of money have fulfilled many of their dreams.

On the one hand, money is the centre of the worlds problems. But that is not because of the money itself. It is because of the people who cat not use it wisely. Money tends to attract people of a greedy and selfish nature.But even if we have lot of money, we can be sad. Indeed we can have all world's money and be sad, because we are alone. We can nothing and be happy with her family and friends. On the other hand, money is problematic.Some people only know you out of interest , because you have lot of money. Even the rich have problems in their couple, families, and work

MERCI

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22 Novembre 2009 19:01:57

"with her family and friends"
ce serait pas our à la place de her?
"because you have lot of money."
a lot of, me semble-t-il
"Even the rich"
je ne suis pas sûr que ça existe comme nom
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22 Novembre 2009 19:24:31

treborn71 a dit :
bonsoir, j'ai travailler sur un commentaire cettte aprés midi, pouvez vous me le corrigé svp ?

To me, money does bring happiness because it is very important, there are many people all around the world, who have bad living conditions, because they do not have the money for education, medical help, food etc. In today's world, we can not survive without money.Whithout money we can not live.We need money to get a good education, to have a comfortable way of life, to have fun...Therefore money is a necessity for our survival.
you can buy anything you want with money. Some people with lots of money have fulfilled many of their dreams.

On the one hand, money is the centre of the world's problems. But that is not because of the money itself. It is because of the people who do not use it wisely. Money tends to attract people of a greedy and selfish nature.But even if we have lots of money, we can be sad. Indeed we can have all of the world's money and be sad, because we are alone. We can have nothing and be happy with our family and friends. On the other hand, money is problematic.Some people only see you out of interest , because you have lot of money. Even the rich have problems in their couple, families, and work

MERCI


Pourquoi tu mets des virgules partout ?
I do something because it is what I like to do => pas de virgule, la phrase est continue...


Et j'ai notament remplace "poeple only know" (ne vous connaissent) par only see" (ne vous voient/frequentent). Ca me parait plus comprehensible.
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